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'forever yours'.
your words ring in my ears for hours;
after.

i didn't know forever was how long.
guess it was till someone else came along.

standing here, where we had decided to depart,
watching you whisper into someone else's heart;
again.

fake words;
fake promises.

a man's world,
filled with lies men create.

a woman's tears,
live on forever.


forever, that lasts till the heart beats,
till the ocean retreats;
into the horizon.
©2008-2009 ~deepdarkdesires
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Author's Comments

don't ever say forever until you mean for ever.
but, if you actually mean for ever,
you wouldn't even need to say;
forever.

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:iconlyerthruteeth:
good one.

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No cause is lost .....until there is a fool fighting for it.
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:icondeepdarkdesires:
whoaaaaaaaaaaaa?
yea???
thanks soo much..that compliment means a lot

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:iconillyriailly:
very wonderful.

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We cling to what is gone. We look for what is lost. We hope for something that never was. Why fool yourself. Get you butt back into reality. It sucks doesnt it....
:icondeepdarkdesires:
thank you so much! :)

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:iconlyerthruteeth:
it really is.
cant even find wrds to say why it is but it just is.

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No cause is lost .....until there is a fool fighting for it.
:icondeepdarkdesires:
is this like the first poem you've ever liked? anyways, thanks a million for the compliment..glad you liked it. take care..keep in touch, old guy..:D

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:icondezy:
i like the concept. didn't really connect with the way in which it was executed. maybe if you restructure some of the sentences, it might 'flow' better. the last three lines are pretty good.

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Human Relationships are like Pickles...Some of them Mature and Some just go Sour.
:icondeepdarkdesires:
thank you. even i quite liked the concept. i made three drafts, and this is the only one that i liked. the others are either too long and detailled or too clipped. but, i will work on it. thanks for commenting! good day!

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